"Keeping the Faith" analysis

My refrigerator piece about how to successfully keep one's faith while navigating the tricky and discouraging waters of college was a bit confused a first. My initial piece was a bit disorganized, but had good quotes and intent. When I reorganized it and split the paragraphs into steps on how to keep one's faith; to get involved in a church immediately, to question the knowledge of church leaders, etc. I wish I could've talked to some students about their religious experiences in colleges, maybe some alumni, and I could, still, but it would take some more planning and seeking out the right people to interview. This is a sensitive subject for many and would pay out in the end if I could get some first-hand testimonials with students talking about losing and/or keeping their religion through college.
I also think more could've been done concerning being intrinsically or extrinsically religious, which was a really interesting concept to me.
Overall, it was an okay piece and I am extremely passionate about the subject matter and I hope that is able to be seen.